Revision Explaination

I found that the biggest problem with my cathedral analysis was the interchangeable use of the narrator, the main character, and the author. Of course this confused me to no extent when I was proof-reading and I soon learned that I had to stick with only one. So I chose to stick with narrator. Most of my revisions are from sentences with weird syntax and moving sentences around to strengthen the point I’m trying to convey in the paragraph. I also added much more verbs and adjectives into my paragraph, making it sound more spiffy. I worked the most on the introductory paragraph which I though was the weakest. When reading it over again, I felt that it made little to no sense and had a weak argument. So I reworked the sentences with better structure and adjectives and verbs. Also in my previous essay, I focused on two things, point of view and tone. I decided it would be more effective to focus more on point of view and use tone as a way to strengthen it.